Hint: Using a CS Heavy right after you stunned him with your revenge tends to work better than letting the revenge go (which takes far more time) and then dashing. It would have saved you more times than the tactic you used.
What I didn't really like was the fast speed + some effects. It made it really difficult to watch at Full Screen (720, highest res ofc). You should try to avoid that next time.
The story was decent and I think that the fact that you are a Super Rookie can save you from the "You are so lame, I can do better than you even tho I am not a SOer".
If you ever need any help you can try contacting me, I always check if there are new topics from the "latest topics" so I will definitely see if you post here. Otherwise we can also exchange emails.
Gz and keep trying.